高三英语作文讲评
——答谢词
一中国中学生旅游团（a high school student touring group）应邀访问美国某中学。美国朋友举行了一个欢迎会，主人致欢迎词后，你代表（on behalf of）旅游团致答词。内容如下：
1. 对主人热情邀请你们访问并举行隆重欢迎会表示衷心感谢。
2. 该校是美国的一所名校，今天有机会到此访问深感荣幸。
3. 深信些次短暂访问一定会丰富多彩。愿和美国学生交流学习经验，特别是如何学好英语方面，请美国朋友提出宝贵建议。
注意：不要逐字翻译提示；词数100左右。
学生作文一
Dear everyone,
I’m very glad to have the honour to be on behalf of our student touring group to give you our thankful words1.
First of all, thank you for inviting us to visit your school and for your warm welcome meeting. As it is known to all, your school is a famous school at home or abroad2. And we are all more than fortunate to have a chance to visit it. As a result3, we strongly believe that this visit will be wonderful and successful.
Finally, we are very willing to exchange the experience of studying with you. Especially, if you give us some advice on how to learn English, we will feel pleased. Hope that we will have a good time dring4 this visit. That’s all, thank you. (131 words)
教师批改
1. give you our thankful words宜改为express our thanks，这样更正式些。
2. 该短语正确的说法是at home and abroad，意思是“国内外”，此处不宜，对于中国人来说美国不属国内，根据所给材料，最好改为in the states。
3. as a result不当。后一句并非前文导致的结果。可改用So起语气上的过渡。
4. 拼写错误。应为during。
点评：
全文语言流畅，条理清楚，要点全，能使用较复杂的句式结构，文中较多地使用了短语和句型。最后得分27。
修改后作文
Dear friends,
On behalf of our student touring group, I am very glad to express our thanks to our American friends.
First of all, thank you for inviting us to visit your school and for your warm welcome. We all know that your school is a famous school in the states. And we are all more than fortunate to have a chance to visit it. So we strongly believe that this visit will be interesting and successful.
Finally, we are willing to exchange the experience of studying with you. If you can give us some advice on how to learn English, we would appreciate it. Hope that we will have a good time together. That’s all. Thank you.
学生作文二
Dear our American friends,
I’m very glad to have the honor to make this speech. First, please let me on behalf of all of us express our thanks for your invitation and warm welcome.
The school is a world-famous university1, so we are lucky that we have the chance to visit it. We believe that during the visit we can get on well with each other and this visit will turn out a success. What’s more, we hope that American friends would like to help us with our English as well as something else2. Thanks to the visit, we can talk about the experience in study with American students and have a better understand3 of America.
教师批改
1. 与材料不符。
2. 去掉as well as something else。
3. understand改为understanding。
点评：
语言地道，要点全。最后得分27。
修改后作文
Dear friends,
I’m very glad to have the honor to make this speech. First, please allow me to express our thanks for your invitation and warm welcome on behalf of our touring group.
We know this school is very famous in the states. So we are lucky that we have the chance to visit it. We believe that during the visit we can get on well with each other and this visit will turn out a success. What’s more, we hope that American friends would like to help us with our English and give us some advice on how to learn it well. Thanks to the visit, we can talk about the experience in study with our American friends and have a better understanding of your country and culture.
参考范文
Ladies and gentlemen,
Dear friends,
First of all, please permit me, on behalf of all the members of my group, to express our heartfelt thanks to you for your kind invitation to visit your school. Thank you for giving us such a warm welcome.1
Your school is one of the famous high schools in USA. We feel greatly honored to2 have such a nice chance to visit it today.
We are sure that our short stay here will be rich and colorful. We’d like to exchange experience in study with American students, and what’s more, we wish our American friends would give us some advice on how to learn English well.
Thank you again for your warm welcome.3
点评：
1. 致答词第一部分一般都要向东道主表示感谢。这一段里有很多有用的短语和表达法，比如：on behalf of 代表；express our heartfelt thanks to表示衷心感谢。
2. feel honored to do sth表示“很荣幸”。
3. 在结束时再一次表示感谢也是这类文体的一种格式。